For my choice chapter in “They Say I Say” I chose “Her point is” which is the Art of summarizing. I chose this one because I feel although summarizing is not a major part of writing an academic essay it is still something that I need help with and will help me down the road. Some things that the chapter suggested that I think will help me is knowing where I want the final product to be and making me aware of some of the negatives that can come along with a bad summary. If I try to do some things better and take out all the negatives I feel it will help my writing a lot .
When it comes to revisions I made in my essay:
My old thesis was: It is beneficial for the greater good of students to implement both art and sciences in an equal fashion to further expand their knowledge of life.
My new thesis is : It is beneficial for the greater good of sports management majors to implement both art and sciences in an equal fashion to further expand their knowledge of creativity and intelligence.
In my second body paragraph I added: “To be able to stand out in my career, I will need to learn how to be creative and learn to collaborate. If school systems teach this, my employers will know that I have a good background in arts that will further help me make decisions in my future career.” To offer additional analysis.
These are just two changes that I have made so far but I still plan on changing more and adding more when I finish editing my essay.