Old thesis- Beauty is something that every person in society views differently and has their own perspective on. Although beauty is so easy to find in the world today there are still times people disagree and different communities disagree what is beautiful.
New Thesis –
Everyone experiences beauty in different ways, whether that be by chance or on purpose. The deeper meaning is open for interpretation but is is important to always look at it with a deeper meaning.
After peer review in class I feel like I can take my essay to another level after hearing what critiques my classmates made. They gave me a lot of suggestions on my first couple of paragraphs and asked me questions that will help spur some more ideas when I go back to write my final draft. I plan on first going through my claims and making them more specific and going more in depth. Then from there I still have aot of ideas on beauty that do not relate with my current body’s so I may have to go back and add another body paragraph.
